Today, I Read an Awesome story! It was called "Warriors: Omen Of The Stars, The Fourth Apprentice." It was about a cat named Dovekpaw that recently became an apprentice in Thunderclan, And after a few days She starts to realize that she has the power to know what happens far away. Two Thunderclan cats, Lionblaze And Jayfeather suspect that she must be the cat that the prophecy "After the sharp-eyed jay and the roaring lion, peace will come..." Meanwhile, there is a drought in Thunderclan and they try to find out what has happened to the water. Then, Dovepaw sees something brown and hard blocking the rushing water. So one cat from every clan goes to investigate. This story was so exciting!!
It sounds like a cool book, Hajar. Please keep the following things in mind and try not to make the same mistakes in your next post:
ReplyDelete- Don't make a word capitalized unless it is supposed to be. ("I Read an Awesome story" is wrong)
- Make sure everything is in the same tense. Either the whole thing should be in past tense or the whole thing in present tense. Otherwise it gets confusing and it is not written in proper grammar. First you wrote Dovepaw "became" an apprentice. Then you saw "she starts to realize" which is in present. Don't mix it all up.
Otherwise, good job!